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Comment on HERO(FINAL) by marshmallow@888

marshmallow@888 — Fri, 20 Mar 2009 10:40:25 +0000

Hey Terry. I like you’re final story. I think is has enough action and pacing but you need to add some more details in some parts. Not to much, but some. Otherwise, this a great story and a great final.

Comment on Hero (Revised) by Jaspal'in!

Jaspal'in! — Fri, 20 Mar 2009 00:16:37 +0000

You did better by going more into detail, but you didn’t really go into detail the character’s thoughts and feelings that well. You need to say how he felt and other stuff like that. Otherwise you have a really good story!

Comment on Hero by Jaspal'in!

Jaspal'in! — Fri, 20 Mar 2009 00:13:04 +0000

Good story, but you seemed a little bit fast paced. You need to go more into detail, so people won’t be lost when reading. Also, you need to go into detail how your character feels, you haven’t really described his feeling much at all in the whole story.

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Comment on The Watery Grave by Zack

Zack — Fri, 13 Feb 2009 00:42:12 +0000

Hey terry its Zack and i liked your story. except for allthroughterrifying 10

Comment on Hero by SARAH

SARAH — Thu, 12 Feb 2009 23:54:44 +0000

terry, you might want to take out a little bit of dialogue its a bit to much. overall good job.

Comment on Hero by Jackson

Jackson — Thu, 12 Feb 2009 22:51:01 +0000

Its a very good story, but you could add a couple things to it. First, you probably should go into a little more detail. When I was reading, I could sort of tell what was going on, but there wasn’t enough information for me to make any sense of it. Second, you need to slow down the pace of the story. It goes so fast I barely had time to register what was happening before you changed the subject

Comment on The Curse of Racism and Discrimination by andrebms

andrebms — Fri, 19 Dec 2008 05:35:31 +0000

This was a magnificent read! If it was n’t for the leaders of our past we probably wouldn’t havethe same classes together. People have no reason for what they do (sometimes they do, but you get my point) it is either for the bad or the good, and you talked about both. Good Job!!!

Comment on Global Crises by steven

steven — Thu, 18 Dec 2008 22:45:58 +0000

this is a verry thought essay. great

Comment on Good or Bad? by terry

terry — Thu, 11 Dec 2008 22:50:45 +0000

THIS STORY IS THE GREATEST!!!!!!!!!!